CONOLAIR, Blake

[BLAKE LYNN CONOLAIR]

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.Blake Lynn Conolair.

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basics![/ul]
full name! Blake Lynn Conolair
nicknames! Blakesh. Blay. Lakie. Bee.
age and birth date! She has blown out sixteen candles. 6/4/1993
grade! sophomore
major! Musician
schedule!
History of Music- Jazz and Rock and Roll
Private Lessons- Bass Guitar
Music Theory I
Foreign Language I- Spanish
Science II- Chemistry

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physical![/ul]
play by! Zoe Kimball
height! 5'3'
weight! one hundred twenty. 120 lbs
physical differences to model! She has a scar that stretches across the Left side of her collar bone. It is whi9te an the first thing you notice when you meet her. She got it from falling out of her aunts hay mound when she was ten.

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mental![/ul]
likes!
Well,Lets see... How I came to like boys..Hmmm...I don't know have you looked at my sexuality lately :3 If you haven't you probably have no idea what I'm talking about. OH MY GAWD Billie Joe Armstrong Is the hottest ;3 He's mine to all you fan girls of Green Day. Oh lets see; I came to Flirting when I was what, Thirteen maybe? I haven't really attracted a crown from flirting with boys. Trust me I probably have more guys on my friends list than girls. And last but not least, Socialization! I cannot live without talking to other people.

I would die. Well most people know me as the 'Party Girl' Of the group. Well Yeah, It's true, I do like to party.
dislikes!
Hm... The only thing I really dislike are Lezbians... Gross, I mean I couldn't even imagine kissing the same sex.

habits!
One, I am Very over protective of family and friends and
Two i cry alot. Well I can't help it, I just feel the need to cry. Yeah Thats right. I'm Sort of Emo. Big Deal.
secrets!
I've never kissed a guy. Surprising, I know.
random facts!
OH, I like pink muffins with sprinkles.... They're my favorite. Oh and I have been known to Over- Flirt sometimes so... Just forget about it...

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attraction![/ul]
sexual orientation! Straight
turn ons!
- Hair
- Eyes
turn offs!
- Freckles
- Her Bad attitude
past/current relationships!
She was once in love with a guy. Long story short, he became obsessive and thrown in jail. End of story
the virginity question! She's always been a virgin. This may change...

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history![/ul]
hometown!
Birchwood, Colorado
mother!
Alexandra Marie Conolair
father!
Leon David Vangilder
siblings!
None
other important relations! None she knows of.
income! Oh we're wealthy but sort of turning poor.

GENERAL HISTORY!
Okay, Suppose I have to Start with my birth. When I was born, My mother Alexandra thought me to be a 'surprise' for my dad. This 'Surprise' was a little bit too overwhelming for My father, Leon. So I guess you could say my mother was pregnant with me because she was a stupid young adult. When my first birthday came along, My father couldn't stand my mother. The Divorce came on their anniversary that year.

Of course at the time I really didn't know my mother, or my father. I was sent to live with my Uncle Matt when I was four and a half. What a Thrilling story... Am I right? Anyways, I grew up on a farm and most likely you'd think a girl like me would be strong and tan. No, I am not strong nor tan. I am Skinny and Pale. All this time moving I switched schools, and once I became a High schooler, I chose to attend Harbin Academy.

And I'll Tell you one thing. I have come to like it. Okay, A little bit more about the farm. First, I did like my Uncle, Not my Aunt. When I grew up on my Uncles farm, I used to help him in the stables. You see, My uncles farm was practicly a boarding stable for quarter horses and crossed breeds. I began fimilliar with the smell of hay and manure i nthe morning when I woke up,got dressed, and started off the day. My favorite horse was a Black and white painted Quarter horse named Kellys Magic, Or M. She was atleast sixteen when she died, because I remember her dying a few years ago.

Thats one of my personal things so If I catch you telling someone about it. I will shoot you.
Literally.

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the man behind the curtain![/ul]
your name! Rai
age! 15.
contacts! Pm me.
roleplaying experience! Hmm... three years for sure.
mystery phrase! "You fancyfandango!"

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roleplay sample![/ul]

The dog trailed slightly ahead of her, Only by a few yards. Bailey jogged to keep up with the dog, her face almost red from jogging. But somehow her face still managed to look pretty when it was red. Why she was out here? She was exploring. Deja-vu couldn't be heard by the human ear, but by something else there was no doubt they could hear her. Bailey was dressed in navy blue skinny jeans,black and white converse, and a dark Grey Ambercombie and Fitch t-shirt,Her hair was down against her shoulders.

She was honestly scared to death to be out here. But Deja-vu wouldn't listen to her. She guessed they were about three miles into the woods. You could here Bailey gasping for air. Everything around her scared her. Being only fifteen turning sixteen soon, she was frightened. But yes, still rebellious. Finally Deja-vu stopped but wouldn't come near Bailey. Ahead of her Bailey could see a shadow. Her heart was pounding and she felt like her heart was going to fall out of her chest.
And-
'JOHNNY IS TRUANT'

[WINN HOLDEN BRANTON.]

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HOLD UP.

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after reading your application, we've noticed a few problems,
but don't fret! they're easily fixable.

First, there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors in this. I know, this isn't school, we're not being graded or whatever, but a major part of writing is proper grammar, proper spelling- it makes things so, so much easier to read.

I would like to see a little more... personality, in the 'mental' section, though. The reason why I don't have a general personality section is because most people type their apps out in first person, and give a lot of their character's personality throughout the app anyways... I'm not complaining about the fact that you used third person, I don't mind that. But maybe add a bit more detail to the bullet points. What does she watch on Comedy Central? How did she get into Green Day? Why doesn't she like Lesbians? Also, I'd like for you to give her at least one secret, no matter how small it is.

The main thing, though, is the history. I'm not trying to be mean or anything here, but it... It doesn't make much sense. It just... jumps into this man named Pellidore, and her father wanting to kill him because he... hit Blake? Something about being considered a teenager and vampires... From what I get, her father's in jail for murder and her mother committed suicide because of it, am I right? Maybe if you gave a bit more detail, began when the two met, described a bit why her father wanted to kill him, the likes.

you can do it

You have two days to fix these problems and reply back to this thread
stating that you have fixed the problems before your character is denied. Good
luck!

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[BLAKE LYNN CONOLAIR]

Hey :3
Hey um I fixed it. I hope it is better then when I didn't modify it *crosses fingers*

[WINN HOLDEN BRANTON.]

yes, it's much, much better! (:

But since I need your history to be three full paragraphs long, could you try and write one more paragraph? Maybe what it was like on the farm, did she like her aunt and uncle, when she started getting into photography, the likes. After that you'll be set, I'm sure of it!

[BLAKE LYNN CONOLAIR]

M.O.D.I.F.I.E.D.!

[WINN HOLDEN BRANTON.]

It looks good! Just make sure you watch your grammar errors, spelling errors and typos in the roleplay!

congrats and welcome to thank god it's fatal!